Post #138. 13 more to go…
Looking back at when the last posts were made for ‘On Venusian Cloud Colony Number Nine’ and ‘Sayeh and Zia’, realising that it has been over a week (8 days) and just under a week (6 days) for the other is disappointing.
The reason for this is due to a virtue distorting itself into a vice. It has been mentioned that my orderliness is a good thing, and something that I keep to in an attempt for it to flow into the story and make it a cohesive whole.
Orderliness has demonised itself by stopping me moving on until I complete the next scene (Chapter 4 Scene 1) of OVCC#9. The flight, including stop-overs, between Geneva and Bangui is almost 19 hours. The previous post mentioned the various places the flight passes over, and I feel that this diversity should be described well in the first scene of the new chapter. The changes in scenery help flesh out the cultural and environmental differences to Barney’s homes, mentioned frequently but not yet seen. It also helps to set up the arrival at Bangui, with its environmental diversity similar to two worlds. One Barney is uncomfortable in, and the other the epitomy of his comfort zone.
Once this block is worked through, the new characters are there, waiting to be introduced and fleshed out. A niggling issue is whether the sense of foreboding is enough, as only one person has been affected so far, and they are in a coma. Chapter 4 Scene 2 will be the exact half-way point of the story, so maybe that is a good place to start the carnage.
Once that is done, I can get back to Susa and the impending arrival of the renowned merchant and hopeful suitor, Yafeu Babafemi.
I apologise for the delay in these stories, but I promise that everything is being done to ensure that the quality of the writing is on the up and up. Thank you for your patience =)