So, I currently have the introductory scenes for 4 of my antagonists. 3 for the first book, 1 for the second book.
Since my sister is the only person I know who could appreciate fantasy-style writing, I gave the sections to her for a read. Thought what was written was good, but not too much in-depth feedback.
Though the wife does not read fantasy or sci-fi (the closest thing to it that she reads are the Eve Dallas books by JD Robb), I gave them to her for a read.
BOOK 1 CHAPTER 1 SCENE 1
This is 3 pages at the moment.
Too much sexualising of the main protagonist? Considering she is meant to be a jaw-dropper, it made sense.
Fair enough, use the other antagonist’s perspective to visualise her. He is a male, he’s gotta appreciate jaw-dropping beauty right?
Despite that, the wife likes the main antagonist as a character. Which was amusing later on.
BOOK 1 CHAPTER 1 SCENE ?
This section is in limbo at the minute, since it may be scene 3 or scene 4. A big fight scene that’s 5 pages.
The wife: “Wow, I hate her now! Her Dad’s awesome!” Not sure if that is good or bad. Since the antagonist’s Dad is a stand-up bloke who proves his awesomeness, and she secretly wants to beat him… Yeah, I can see that.
BOOK 1 CHAPTER 4 SCENE 1
This popped into my head yesterday morning for another character, and once typed up was a tiny bit over 2 pages.
Not too much to change, but the wife liked the characterisations and wants to know what the character has that will be ‘of great interest’.
BOOK 2 CHAPTER 1 SCENE 1
This was the section mentioned in the previous post.
It has been placed here because the wife read it and said, “That is awesome! It’s a perfect first chapter to the next book.”
Start new books with a bang to get the reader’s interest? An action scene must be the way to go about it =)
Unfortunately, it means a reshuffling of the pacing, but I thought it was needed anyways. If the 2nd book starts with the 6 antagonists teamed up against 1 protagonist… Yeah, kinda lopsided and not believable.
But, positive reviews! Woohoo!